I just finished reading a Non-Fiction called The USA by Terry Deary. It is a hilarious book(laughing noise in background) and part of the Horrible Histories series.It tells you about all the US facts ( with the gross facts included as well )Including The time line of the american civil war( Mr. Buxton, can I keep this book for the S.S?)It also tells you about the outlaws and Cowboys. And the wicked WILD west. the last partner Outlaws were Butch Cassidy( Real Name : George Leroy Parker ) and Tom McArty and....( at this point I can make and Inference) Held a bottle of water up in a bank they were about to rob and clever labeled it Nitro-Clyceryne and said If I drop this we will be blasted to Antartica. The Bank paid him $ 21,000 to go away and then McArty promptly threw the bottle away.I can Infer they the people at the bank must not be very smart and McArty must infer the same way as I am that the bank isn`t very smart so he went there.
Another Inference I could make was on page 79 when the writer William Jenks in 1808 pradicted that people would fight about slavery. He even said the war would start in 1856,the war started in 1861 but the violence started... Guess... guess When??? 1856!!!!( people screaming WHAT????? in distance)
To Mr. Buxton (hope you enjoyed reading this...)
Another Inference I could make was on page 79 when the writer William Jenks in 1808 pradicted that people would fight about slavery. He even said the war would start in 1856,the war started in 1861 but the violence started... Guess... guess When??? 1856!!!!( people screaming WHAT????? in distance)
To Mr. Buxton (hope you enjoyed reading this...)
Rohan,
ReplyDeleteMaybe you shouldn't add so many things in brackets, like the sound effects, because it distracts from the actual writing about the book. Just to say one of the sentences didn't start with a capital letter. Also if you wanted to ask Mr. Buxton something, you should ask him in class, not in a book response.
good Discriptive language just like maya said I think you should not put so many things in brackets.
ReplyDelete,Harrisen
Okay, I kind of get that. So less brackets and more actual writing.
ReplyDeleteDid I use good vocab?
ReplyDeleteyou need to look at all your sentence opening and think about how you can start applying some of the advanced sentence beginning that we have been opening.
ReplyDeletewhat do you think the author did that was not effective?
what aspects of the story would you have changed?
Only one thing. I am trying to create the first perspective of Teary Deary.
ReplyDeleteHe uses a lot of brackets and uses stuff erelevant to the story.